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12/16/2018 9:15:34 PM
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And an article, what's it qualify.

William Darnell Sr.
Posts: 3
Must it meet a certain number of character's? And thanks, figured I better ask.
12/16/2018 9:00:33 PM
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Question in regards to short stories?

William Darnell Sr.
Posts: 3
What qualifies a short story? Is there a specific number of words to be considered a short Story.
12/16/2018 7:44:53 PM
Topic:
I been stuck in a block for awhile now.

William Darnell Sr.
Posts: 3
Just been in a rut, blocked but who knows what and why? I know the answer and it's quite a heavy thing. Been at me a few years steady. But for 22 it's been there a pretty long time. Personal, very much so, but a good way. I've been working this over and over in my mind. I need find its way to get it out, otherwise it's going to keep me in a place I've been trying 22 years to come home! Just a random here. By the way, my name is William. Been a member since I think 2013. Anyways, I'm here and read. By the way again, Merry Christmas people from around the world. May your holiday be a joyous one bringing good health and prosperity! Prolly see you all in 2019!
12/16/2018 7:15:26 PM
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What do you consider "Not a poem" ?

Wendy Nipas
Posts: 35
Any piece of writing that does not inspire, any piece of writing that has no effect whatsoever on the emotions or the mind. Any piece of writing that is just a number of words strung together with no purpose or meaning. I'd say none of that is poetry.
edited by wendyme on 12/16/2018
12/16/2018 6:59:41 PM
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A Poet's Lament!

Wendy Nipas
Posts: 35
I do believe that the time we're living in shapes people's thoughts, feelings, aspects that play an important role in being creative and becoming inspired. Not to say that poets writing poetry not really to our liking are not inspired. It's just the difference in inspiration I guess. And of course technicality will suffer. Personally I love the story within the poem. It should never become too complicated. A lot of poetry nowadays seems forced, almost mysterious and unrelatable. Bring back the story, make it real. Poetry, especially published poetry should deliver a message. What or who does it serve when the message does not come across? Has language become more complicated? I would think not. And poetry was not supposed to be understood only by 'professionals'. If I'm not mistaken, the works of the greats were read and understood by everyday people as well.I don't know. I do NOT consider myself a professional, but I dare to think I do know a good poem when I see one, simply because it tells a good STORY. These are my humble thoughts on the matter. All the best.
12/15/2018 7:19:58 PM
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The test (Please critique)

Wendy Nipas
Posts: 35
Thank you Charles, very kind of you.


Charles wrote:
Wendy: Just have to give you an A on this one dear. You kept your pace, form, conviction and content all the way through a long formidable subject. Good write. Charles Henderson
edited by Charles on 12/13/2018
12/15/2018 5:36:20 AM
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MOST BEAUTIFUL PERSON

Arjun Jangid
Posts: 8
Please give your opinion
12/13/2018 1:01:18 PM
Topic:
The test (Please critique)

Charles Henderson
Posts: 7
Wendy: Just have to give you an A on this one dear. You kept your pace, form, conviction and content all the way through a long formidable subject. Good write. Charles Henderson
edited by Charles on 12/13/2018
12/13/2018 1:53:32 AM
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Ardent Jogger Poem

Louie Goodwin
Posts: 1
Good article
12/10/2018 10:47:03 AM
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MOST BEAUTIFUL PERSON

Arjun Jangid
Posts: 8
As i heard about the contest
of most beautiful person
I packed my luggage hurriedly
and ran in search of that lucky person.

First of all i recalled my teacher
leisure time creation of the God
if eyes may be judge,the winner was she.
But me and my friends were bitten
several times so without beautiful heart
how can be winner , may be she.

Next i saw a body builder
well balanced muscles and bones
but he was soon lost the contest
because he was made for ownself not for others .

All physical beauty killed by time
so smart personalities lost charm
of win the most beautiful person
without any more harms.

After i saw a half naked boy
sharing his alms with stray dog
unwillingly i followed him
to declare the most beautiful person .
But regret he lost the chance also
when I followed him to give the title
he kicked the same love chained dog .

So the search for most beautiful person
is still going on if anybody meet the person
who have the beautiful heart
at universal place and at universal time.

Give regards, title and salaam
from me and whole mankind.
12/10/2018 10:12:28 AM
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Don't Clap Gentlemen

Arjun Jangid
Posts: 8
Sir
iam thank ful to you. You give your precious time.
But i am not agree that we are waste of space. We are super intelligent but we are narrow minded.
we are divided on base of nationalities, religions, castes and on base of colour also.
if we should work for common welfare. we should have proved ourselves first human.
12/8/2018 3:00:14 PM
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A Poet's Lament!

ARBOL VERDE
Posts: 3
Someone once said. "Most of the poets of today have the spider's talent of spinning but not her art of weaving."
12/7/2018 9:12:43 PM
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Don't Clap Gentlemen

Jonathan French
Posts: 4
GROW UP. Humans are a waste of space, male and female. What do you expect?
12/7/2018 1:32:56 PM
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Don't Clap Gentlemen

Arjun Jangid
Posts: 8
Sir
iam very thankful to you .You explained me truly.
I tried to write stire on blind competition of deadly weapons. I scare if they prove their birth .
12/7/2018 1:24:06 PM
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Don't Clap Gentlemen

Arjun Jangid
Posts: 8
superlativedeleted wrote:
Arjun,

This is a very strong poem. It ultimately questions: what is it to be civilized?

The poem challenges colonialist pride, and shows how pride can easily lead to evil that does great harm to others. The poem questions the philosophy of what makes something the enemy. The poem illustrates how making enemies of others is a downfall for oneself and leads to harming others.

It makes the gentleman a symbol of pride, of being civilized, then shows them applauding death, destruction, and barbarism.

The question: what's good about making corpses? is very strong.

Juxtaposing the stars in the sky with the corpses on the ground is an extremely strong poetic image.

The english does need work, but no problem. You can take it to someone that knows English well and work with them. The english is not the poem. The images, contemplation, how things are arranged are the poem, and you've done it very well.

If you have not already written this in Hindi, write it in Hindi to make sure you have a copy of the ideas, images, arrangement just as you like, that way you do not forget. Then, work on the English with a tutor or friend. No problem. Very good.

It is good you are writing about life, about the world. Poet-journalist. This is good. Too many people write about themselves; an unfortunate western habit.
12/6/2018 6:06:06 PM
Topic:
Poll Question: Featured Poetic Forms...

Gregory R Barden
Posts: 22
Why not? Any thoughtful addition of resource or feature would improve the site and add to the diversity of its membership. Go for it!
12/4/2018 10:32:21 AM
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The test (Please critique)

Wendy Nipas
Posts: 35
Hi Jack,
To answer your question, uh, confessional poets? I may sound a bit ignorant, but I don't really know any confessional poets. I guess I should? I'm so new at this. Will you recommend some?Why the question if I may ask? And thanks for replying.

superlativedeleted wrote:
Do you have any favorite confessional poets?
12/3/2018 2:27:03 AM
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Please Critique

Jack Webster
Posts: 93
the emotional themes of your work seem to be grief, yearning, nostalgia, angst, anxiety.




the poetic insight/ contemplation seems to be the revelation of interdependent existence: harming your world harms my world (which could be elevated to a universal theme).




One of the strong impressions I get from the work is that you've written it for yourself, sort of writing down an imaginary conversation you're having in your head. One of the most seductive qualities a poem can posses is the reader feeling that the author is aware of their presence and is speaking to them, or at least if not speaking to them has created something for them to experience. When an author writes a poem essentially talking to themselves, or someone other than the reader, a lot of the magic of poetry itself is lost (in my opinion). (How fun would a rollercoaster be if it was built only for the girlfriend of the CEO to ride? I guess the crowd could stand around it and think pleasent well wishes to the CEO and his girlfriend, but no one is going to be raising their hands as they go over a hill, or yelling as they feel their stomach float on the drop.) This a very common critique I make; it is not something unique to your poem.




Personally, I'm (usually) a big fan of imagism, using images and concrete details to tell the story or to convey a deeper level of emotion. But, that's a personal preference. I would like to encourage you to explore use of imagery in your poem.





There is a device in poetry called 'the Proustian Moment,' The author writes in first person. The poem begins in the present, describing going about a daily activity, observing details in the environment. Suddey the speaker stumbles upon a small detail, inconsequential to anyone else, and the author begins remembering a moment from the past, in lush, rich detail, perhaps a scene of happiness. Then the speaker returns to the present moment. One can either emphasize the absence of the thing/ person remembered, or one can express the spark of life has been restored through the remembrance, or some other dynamic, but the point is that the rememberance impacts being in the present somehow, the past and present do not exist apart from each other, which touches nicely your poetic thought that your world and the world of the lost one are connected. Perhaps the speaker discovers their worlds are still connected, that she is still alive, a part of him/her because the past is a living thing, not a dead thing and the speaker is freed of his/her madness; or, perhaps the remembrance only deepens the madness and angst of the present.





I think you should play with your poem like this. Even though you will be writing in first person, write as if the only person that will ever hear it is the reader, and you don't know who that person is. When you refer to the lost love, use third person pronouns she/he etc...




hope some of my suggestions are helpful. thank you for letting us read your poem.
12/3/2018 1:33:00 AM
Topic:
Learn To Be Still

Jack Webster
Posts: 93
I'm sorry you've removed your poem. My opinions are frequently in the minority on here. The value of your work remains immutable regardless of the presence of artistry. Your work is greater than the response of one critique. There is no doubt in my mind many on the site will connect with it in a meaningful way. I hope you will repost it and allow them the opportunity to receive your thoughts for themselves.
12/2/2018 10:10:20 PM
Topic:
Poetry into greeting cards

Mario Walker
Posts: 2
I created a poem a while back called a gift of Friendship and I made it into an ecard or a digital greet-card. My question is that is there a market for cards. Here's the poem I made (Gift Of Friendship).

Friendship is a gift.
You showed me what a friend is;
You support, encourage and uplift.

I don't take for granted the bond we share
It's by grace that we pair
You show me that someone really do care.



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